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 Title: I Told You So
Rating: PG
Pairing: Joe Thornton/Jonathan Cheechoo
Word count: 521
Disclaimer: I don’t own anything. If I did I wouldn’t be here =)
Summary: Joe needs space, Jon gives it to him

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Trying out this idea of real ConCrit...

[zdarovyeh.livejournal.com]

Although I love the idea of this pairing (and have written it, too!) and the premise that their relationship is pretty broken...this sadly didn't do it for me, mostly because Cheech's mindset comes off, to me, like the abused SO who thinks they're the only one who understands his partner and will take someone back no matter how poorly they're treated. And I have to think Cheech has more self-respect than that.

There were a few grammar wobbles that detracted from my reading enjoyment, as well, but I don't apply the red pen unasked. :)